[Gen-art] review of draft-hoffman-taobis-06.txt
Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@point6.net> Sun, 23 April 2006 15:31 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-hoffman-taobis-06.txt
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Summary: ready Some small editorial stuff (should be fixed at AUTH48 or by the RFC editor): - 3 page 6: see [BCP95] -> see BCP 95 [BCP95] - 3 page 7: is comes -> either "is" or "comes", "is" seems more correct - 3 page 7 (suggestion): you'll be badly -> you could be badly - 5.2 page 25: @rooms.jabber.ietf.org (the name recently changed) - 8.3 page 32 (suggestion): keep the BCP 9 quote as a quote - 8.3.1 page 33 (suggestion): put the 5th item of the list of four after the list. - 11 page 46: Section 8.4.5 -> Section 8.4.4 (suggestion: use an internal citation, and add the same fix to RFC 3160 errata) - B page 52 (uncommon English): the IETF "tick" - B3 P11 page 53 (wording): Absent -> With Absent - B5 P23 page 54: quality and correctness => plural? - B5 P25 page 54: doesn't -> does not Regards Francis.Dupont@point6.net _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
- [Gen-art] review of draft-hoffman-taobis-06.txt Francis Dupont
- [Gen-art] Re: review of draft-hoffman-taobis-06.t… Paul Hoffman