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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-ippm-ioam-flags-08
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Document: draft-ietf-ippm-ioam-flags-08
Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat
Review Date: 2022-06-??
IETF LC End Date: 2022-06-14
IESG Telechat date: ?

Summary:

This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should 
be fixed before publication.

Issues:

Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits:  2

1) NIT: Doc name inconsistent with scope

The name & title of this draft isn't very indicative of the content of 
the document. This document doesn't just define the *flag* for loopback; 
it also defines the entire loopback *mechanism*, which is a much bigger 
deal.

It appears to me that the primary function of the document is to define 
the loopback mechanism, with the definition of the flag being necessary 
but secondary.

This could be fixed by simply changing the name and title of the 
document. (Or at least the title since the name will disappear in the 
resulting rfc.)

Or the specification of the loopback *mechanism* could be moved to a 
different document and this document reduced to simply defining the flags.

2) NIT: Outdated reference

IdNits reports:
  == Outdated reference: draft-ietf-ippm-ioam-data has been published as
     RFC 9197

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