[Gen-art] review of draft-kivinen-802-15-ie-04.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Wed, 15 February 2017 12:58 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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Document: draft-kivinen-802-15-ie-04.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20170210
IETF LC End Date: 20170214
IESG Telechat date: 20170224

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 
 - ToC page 1 and 3 page 3 (title): Benefitting -> Benefiting

 - 3 page 3 (suggest):  CoRE etc, ->  CoRE, etc,

 - 4 page 3: reading the document I had a question about the "no need
  ... to specify the internal structure" but the reason became clear
  the next page. So I have no concern about this.

Regards 

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr