Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l3-topology-13
"Alexander Clemm" <ludwig@clemm.org> Wed, 13 December 2017 16:53 UTC
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From: Alexander Clemm <ludwig@clemm.org>
To: 'Paul Kyzivat' <pkyzivat@alum.mit.edu>, draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l3-topology.all@ietf.org
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l3-topology-13
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Dear Paul, Thank you very much for your comments! They are all good catches, corrected in -14 (that we will post shortly). Kind regards --- Alex -----Original Message----- From: Paul Kyzivat [mailto:pkyzivat@alum.mit.edu] Sent: Friday, December 1, 2017 9:54 AM To: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l3-topology.all@ietf.org Cc: General Area Review Team <gen-art@ietf.org> Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l3-topology-13 I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l3-topology-13 Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat Review Date: 2017-12-01 IETF LC End Date: 2017-12-11 IESG Telechat date: TBD Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be fixed before publication. Disclaimer: I conducted this review without any knowledge of YANG modeling. So the sort of review I can do is superficial. Issues: Major: 0 Minor: 0 Nits: 2 (1) NIT: Section 1 - Language s/example model is/an example model is/ s/full-blown OSPF model/a complete OSPF model/ s/augments general network/augments the general network/ (2) NIT: Section 4 - typo Something is wrong with: The YANG modules ietf-network and ietf-network are designed to be used in conjunction with implementations that support the Network Did you perhaps mean: The YANG modules ietf-network and ietf-network-topology are ...
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-… Paul Kyzivat
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Jari Arkko
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Paul Kyzivat
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Alexander Clemm