Re: [Gen-art] Genart review of draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-11

Christer Holmberg <christer.holmberg@ericsson.com> Mon, 30 September 2013 17:09 UTC

From: Christer Holmberg <christer.holmberg@ericsson.com>
To: Daniele Ceccarelli <daniele.ceccarelli@ericsson.com>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart review of draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-11
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Hi Daniele,



Your suggested actions to address my issues look good.



Thanks!



Regards,



Christer





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From: Daniele Ceccarelli
Sent: Monday, 30 September 2013 5:01 PM
To: Christer Holmberg; gen-art@ietf.org
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Subject: RE: Genart review of draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-11

Hi Christer,

Thanks for the rewiew. v12 of the drafts should solve your comments.

General:
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                Q_G_1: The document says “ITU-T recommendation G.XXX”, “ITU-T G.XXX”, and “G.XXX”. Please use consistent terminology.
                Authors> ITU-T recommendation G.XXX used on first use and then just G.XXX

Section 3:
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                Q_3_1: The text says “ITU-T recommendation defines”. I guess that shall be G.709?
                Authors> Right, substituted with: G.709-2012

BR
Daniele


From: Christer Holmberg [mailto:christer.holmberg@ericsson.com]
Sent: giovedì 26 settembre 2013 10:12
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Subject: Genart review of draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-11


I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.



Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft.



Document:                         draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-11

Reviewer:                           Christer Holmberg

Review Date:                     26 September 2013

IETF LC End Date:             19 September, 2013

IESG Telechat date:         N/A



Summary:           The document is well written, and ready for publication, but contains some editorial issues that I suggest that the authors consider addressing.



Major issues: -



Minor issues: -



Nits/editorial comments:


General:
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                Q_G_1: The document says “ITU-T recommendation G.XXX”, “ITU-T G.XXX”, and “G.XXX”. Please use consistent terminology.


Section 3:
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                Q_3_1: The text says “ITU-T recommendation defines”. I guess that shall be G.709?

[Gen-art] Genart review of draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-g… Christer Holmberg
Re: [Gen-art] Genart review of draft-ietf-ccamp-o… Daniele Ceccarelli
Re: [Gen-art] Genart review of draft-ietf-ccamp-o… Christer Holmberg
Re: [Gen-art] Genart review of draft-ietf-ccamp-o… Jari Arkko