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Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model-21.txt

Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Wed, 07 March 2018 18:33 UTC

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From: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model-21.txt
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Francis, thanks for your review. I have entered a No Objection ballot.

Alissa

> On Mar 5, 2018, at 5:27 PM, Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> wrote:
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
> by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just
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> Document: draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model-21.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20180225
> IETF LC End Date: 20180228
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
> 
> Summary: Ready
> 
> Major issues: None
> 
> Minor issues: None
> 
> Nits/editorial comments: 
> (I took my notes on version 21 but I have version 23 in front of me)
> 
> - ToC page 2 and 6 page 27 (title): Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
> 
> - 1 page 3: acknowledgement -> acknowledgement
> 
> - 4.1 page 10: do the same than 1.1 page 3: refer to RFC8174 too
>  for keywords.
> 
> - 4.1 page 18 (advanced-compare): spectify -> specify
> 
> - 4.1 page 23 (remote transport and tls) (twice):
>  specified: an ipv4 address, an ipv6 address, ipv4->IPv4 and ipv6->IPv6
> 
> - 6 page 27: there is no "and" between the two last names and no
>  final dot so I am afraid the list was truncated (BTW obviously iy is
>  not the case but please add a final dot, i.e.:
>  Aleksandr Zhdankin -> Aleksandr Zhdankin.
> 
> Note I trust the Yang tools to have checked the syntax.
> 
> Regards
> 
> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
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