[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-ccamp-mpls-gmpls-interwork-reqts-03.txt
Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Fri, 21 December 2007 15:40 UTC
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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-mpls-gmpls-interwork-reqts-03.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2007-12-21 IETF LC End Date: IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Comments: some editorial comments to leasve to the RFC Editor: - Abstract page 1: A MPLS-TE -> An MPLS-TE - 1 page 3: the top of the page 3 has perhaps a pb: "GMPLS protocols were developed as ..." - 3.1 page 5: is the 'adjacencies' word in a dictionary? - 3.9 page 6 (and some others): please introduce list with a sentence finishing by ':'. - 4 page 7: the border routers form part -> the border routers are part? - 4 page 7: the position of the Security Considerations is unusual but I don't believe it matters as soon as there is one. - 5.1 page 9: All three LSP types MAY -> All the three LSP types MAY? - 5.3 page 9: please introduce the FRR abbrev Regards Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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