[Gen-art] Gen-art last call review of draft-zeilenga-ldap-entrydn-01
Elwyn Davies <elwynd@dial.pipex.com> Fri, 02 March 2007 17:33 UTC
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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-zeilenga-ldap-entrydn-01 Reviewer: Elwyn Davies Review Date: 2 March 2007 IETF LC End Date: 30 March 2007 IESG Telechat date: (if known) - Summary: Ready for proposed standard. Editorial nits if you are revising: idnits warns that the RFC2119 language isn't actually used. s1, para 4: s/Search filters above is described using/The example search filter shown in the previous paragraph specifies the components to be matched using/ s1, para 4: s/'componetFilterMatch'/'componentFilterMatch'/ s4.1: The first sentence is not good English. 's5.4'? Should this be 4.2? If so the following sections need renumbering. Also the first sentence needs fixing up in the same way as s4.1. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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