[Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-genarea-datatracker-community-06
"Roni Even" <ron.even.tlv@gmail.com> Thu, 10 March 2011 14:11 UTC
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From: Roni Even <ron.even.tlv@gmail.com>
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-genarea-datatracker-community-06
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-genarea-datatracker-community-06 Reviewer: Roni Even Review Date:2011-3-10 IETF LC End Date: 2011-3-18 IESG Telechat date: Summary: This draft is almost ready for publication as Informational RFC. Major issues: Minor issues: 1. In section 1 "The returned list of I-Ds and/or RFCs includes five columns", the current data tracker has six columns with an IPR column. Is this going to be removed. The whole document does not include it as an attribute. 2. In section 1.3 in the first bullet you do not have sent to RFC editor as a significant change. 3. Is section 1.5 still relevant or can you remove it already. 4. In section 2.3.1 first bullet you mention a view by group name. I did not see any definition of a group and a requirement to be able to name groups Nits/editorial comments: 1. In section 2.3.1 first paragraph "after the user is of the net" should be "off" 2. In section 2.3.2 second paragraph "The default is to display is I-D filename ." the second "is" not needed. 3. In appendix B 4 bullet you have "cull" did you mean "null"