[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-rtcweb-stun-consent-freshness-13
Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Fri, 15 May 2015 20:17 UTC
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-rtcweb-stun-consent-freshness-13 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2015-05-15 IETF LC End Date: 2015-05-15 IESG Telechat date: NA Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments . Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: -The abstract lacks context, please consider adding some more text. A suggestion: repeat the first sentence from the intro in the abstract: "To prevent attacks on peers, endpoints have to ensure the remote peer is willing to receive traffic." -[Page 2] Intro: It was not clear if this document is specific to webRTC implementations. Is there any limitation to only use for webRTC? Maybe a sentence in the intro could clarify if there is or there is not such limitation. -[Page 2] Intro, it would be good if the intro section could give a good example (use case, application) of when a receiving end would revoke the consent during the session.(why closing the session is not enough) -[Page 3], Section2, "Transport Address" definition. It would be good to clarify this wrt 5-tuple. The two terms are used interchangeably, yet Transport address carries only destination IP protocol port, not the sender's (as carried in 5-tuple). e.g. [Page 4]:"....the remote peer's transport address, the endpoint MUST cease transmission on that 5-tuple." -[Page 4] "Initial consent to send traffic is obtained using ICE. Consent expires after 30 seconds." Is this value specified by [RFC6062] or this document? not clear. -[Page 4-5]Section 4.1 addresses security issues. Section 8 adds additional content on security. It would be best to consolidate or at least have Section 8 point back to 4.1. nits: -[Page 5], "can not cause"--->"cannot cause" -[Page 6], "each others keys"--->"each other's keys" -[Page 7], typo "through review"--->"thorough review" -SRTCP,DTLs, etc. please spell out acronyms at first use. Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-… Meral Shirazipour
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Ram Mohan R (rmohanr)
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Meral Shirazipour
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Ram Mohan R (rmohanr)
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Meral Shirazipour