[Gen-art] Re: gen-art review of draft-ietf-geopriv-common-policy-08.txt
Ted Hardie <hardie@qualcomm.com> Thu, 30 March 2006 22:36 UTC
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Date: Thu, 30 Mar 2006 14:35:56 -0800
To: Scott W Brim <sbrim@cisco.com>, General Area Review Team <gen-art@ietf.org>, Henning Schulzrinne <hgs@cs.columbia.edu>, John Morris <jmorris@cdt.org>, Tschofenig Hannes <Hannes.Tschofenig@siemens.com>, Jorge.Cuellar@siemens.com, "James M. Polk" <jmpolk@cisco.com>, 'Jonathan Rosenberg' <jdrosen@cisco.com>
From: Ted Hardie <hardie@qualcomm.com>
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Cc: Cullen Jennings <fluffy@cisco.com>
Subject: [Gen-art] Re: gen-art review of draft-ietf-geopriv-common-policy-08.txt
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This will actually be managed in RAI, by Cullen. He' should be cc'ed on future emails as Area Advisor. I'm happy to continue to follow this, but I am no longer the responsible AD. regards, Ted At 5:08 PM -0500 3/30/06, Scott W Brim wrote: >(For more information on gen-art, you can go to >http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > >It's a great start but I would like to see some changes. > >- The title is simply "A Document Format for Expressing Privacy > Preferences". Could you make it more specific to the context? Once > the draft name is gone, someone picking up the RFC will have trouble > understanding what it's about without reading several pages. In > the second sentence of the abstract, the draft finally notes that > "this framework combines common location- and presence-specific > authorization aspects", which is the first hint of specific context > ... but then it's missing again in the introductory paragraphs. > >- Section 2: If "The terms 'authorization policy rule', 'policy rule' > and 'rule' are used interchangeable", why not consolidate them? > >- Section 3 > > "The using protocol provides the identity of the requestor (or more > precisely the authentication protocol), either at the time of the > query or at the subscription time." > > the () isn't clear. It looks like it's saying the using protocol > provides the authentication protocol. I think you want to say > that the requestor identity may have already been provided and > authenticated. How about something like "The using protocol > provides the identity of the requestor (if it has not already been > provided by other means)"? > >- 3.1 and 3.2: they are called "passive" and "active" but both appear > active to the same degree. A more appropriate naming might be > something like "general" and "specific"? If there is more implied > by the terms passive/active, please make it explicit. > >- 3.3: "Event notification adds a subscription phase to the "PS as > client" mode of operation.". > > That's the first mention of "PS as client". Is that left over > from a previous version's nomenclature? Do you mean "active"? > >- 4: "Versioning support: In addition to the previous goal, a RM > should be able to determine which types of rules are supported by > the PS." > > This is the first time "types of rules" has been mentioned. > Please explain somewhere. > >- 6.1 (identification of rules): is it possible to have more than one > RM? If not, please say so. If so, is there a way for an RM to find > out what rule identifiers are not used, or does it just keep > guessing until it finds one? > >- 10.1: "The term 'permission' stands for an action or a > transformation." > > I've been struggling with this since the beginning of the draft. > It feels awkward and ambiguous, perhaps confusing because I wasn't > in the meetings. To me, the term "permission" would be more > likely to refer to the result of a rule match, a line in a process > diagram as opposed to a box. An action is the thing that is > permitted, the thing which you have permission to execute -- but > it is not the permission itself. > > What really matters is the actions, since without an action the > transforms are irrelevant. For example, in "Let n be a name of a > permission contained in a rule r in M", is it possible to just > talk about the actions, instead of "permissions"? Alternatively, > as a precedent, in the table in 10.2 you use > "actions/transformations" which is a lot less ambiguous. > > >swb _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
- [Gen-art] gen-art review of draft-ietf-geopriv-co… Scott W Brim
- [Gen-art] Re: gen-art review of draft-ietf-geopri… Ted Hardie