Re: [Gen-art] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-dmm-mag-multihoming-04

[Mirja Kühlewind <[e-mail]>]

Thanks for you review! I also noted your second point in my AD review to make sure it gets addressed!


> Am 25.07.2017 um 23:36 schrieb Robert Sparks <[e-mail]>:
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> Reviewer: Robert Sparks
> Review result: Ready with Nits
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> Document: draft-ietf-dmm-mag-multihoming-04
> Reviewer: Robert Sparks
> Review Date: 2017-07-25
> IETF LC End Date: 2017-06-16
> IESG Telechat date: 2017-08-03
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> Summary: Ready with nits that should be addressed before publication as Proposed Standard
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> Thanks for addressing most of the points in my review of -03.
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> There are still a couple of things that I think need attention:
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> * In the second bullet of section 3.2 there is a sentence that does not make sense.
>   Look at "or at When operating" in this sentence:
>    "Packet distribution can be done
>      either at the transport level, e.g. using MPTCP or at When
>      operating at the IP packet level, different packets distribution
>      algorithms are possible."
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> * I still find the definitions of Interface Label and Binding Identifier confusing.
>   I suspect they _both_ need to be carefully rewritten to make sure they are
>   definitions of the terms, and not descriptions of the interactions of the two
>   fields. Why is the Interface Label definition talking so much about binding?
>   As currently written, that last sentence of the Binding Identifier
>   definition says  the document says the mobile access gateway assigns
>   a single unique binding identifier for each of its interfaces. 
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