Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-ietf-netmod-entity-07
Martin Bjorklund <mbj@tail-f.com> Mon, 08 January 2018 11:16 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-ietf-netmod-entity-07
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Hi, Thank you for your review! Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-netmod-entity-07 > Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour > Review Date: 2017-12-22 > IETF LC End Date: NA > IESG Telechat date: 2018-01-09 > > Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC. > > Major issues: > Minor issues: > Nits/editorial comments: > -Many occurrences : "an sensor"--->"a sensor" Fixed in my local copy. > -Although mentioned in Section 9, it would be good for context setting to also add similar text to Intro or Abstract Section: > " > The YANG modules specified in this document define a schema for data > that is designed to be accessed via network management protocols such > as NETCONF [RFC6241] or RESTCONF [RFC8040]. > > " I think that if we add this to this document, the same text should be added to all documents defining YANG modules. It should probably be a recommended template defined in rfc6087bis. This issue should probably be discussed in the WG first. /martin > > > Best Regards, > Meral > --- > Meral Shirazipour > Ericsson Research > www.ericsson.com >
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-i… Meral Shirazipour
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Call review of dra… Martin Bjorklund