[Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-netext-pmip-cp-up-separation-04.txt
Brian E Carpenter <brian.e.carpenter@gmail.com> Sun, 22 June 2014 04:17 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-netext-pmip-cp-up-separation-04.txt
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-netext-pmip-cp-up-separation-04.txt Reviewer: Brian Carpenter Review Date: 2014-06-22 IETF LC End Date: 2014-07-02 IESG Telechat date: Summary: Ready with nits -------- Nits: ----- > IP-within-IP encapsulation [RFC2473] That RFC is specific to IP-in-IPv6. Do you also need to cite something for IPv6-in-IPv4 encapsulation? (It isn't clear to me whether the tunnel shown in Fig. 1 is always -in-IPv6. If it is, OK.) > LMA User Plane Address > > Contains the 32-bit IPv4 address, or the 128-bit IPv6 of the LMA s/IPv6/IPv6 address/ > o When using IPv4 transport for the user-plane, the IP address field > in the option must be the IPv4 address carrying user-plane > traffic. > > o When using IPv6 transport for the user-plane, the IP address field > in the option must be the IPv6 address carrying user-plane > traffic. Should those two occurrences of must be MUST?
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-netext-… Brian E Carpenter
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-net… Sri Gundavelli (sgundave)