[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mip4-multiple-tunnel-support-12
"Vijay K. Gurbani" <vkg@bell-labs.com> Fri, 15 May 2015 15:06 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mip4-multiple-tunnel-support-12
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-mip4-multiple-tunnel-support-12 Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani Review Date: May-15-2015 IETF LC End Date: May-25-2015 IESG Telechat date: Not known This document is ready as an Experimental Standard. A couple of points below need addressing, though. Major: 0 Minor: 2 Nits: 1 Minor: 1/ S4.1, second paragraph: "This extension is a non-skippable extension and MAY be added by the mobile node to the Registration Request message." Two comments. First, does "non-skippable" mean "MUST be present"? If so, why "non- skippable"? At least I have not seen such a phrase in an IETF document before. My suggestion would be to simply say that "This extension MUST be present and ..." Which brings us to the second comment. "... and MAY be added by the mobile node ..." This extension is "non-skippable" (?) but a mobile node MAY add it. If the extension is "non-skippable", then why the MAY? Furthermore, if the intent is for some other entity to add this extension if the mobile node does not (hence the justification of MAY), then you should spell out who this entity is. (Sort of how you do it in S4.2, second paragraph, which contains almost identical language to above without the qualifying last phrase that informs the reader who will add the extension if not the mobile node.) 2/ S4.2, second paragraph: Consider changing the "non-skippable" to "MUST be present" (c.f., above comment). Nits: 1/ S2.2, the following sentence does not read well: A mobile node, when it registers multiple bindings with its home agent, each using different care-of addresses, then each of those bindings are given a unique identifier. Suggested text: When a mobile node registers multiple bindings with its home agent, each using a different care-of address, then each of those bindings are given a unique identifier. Thanks, - vijay -- Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent 1960 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9C-533, Naperville, Illinois 60563 (USA) Email: vkg@{bell-labs.com,acm.org} / vijay.gurbani@alcatel-lucent.com Web: http://ect.bell-labs.com/who/vkg/ | Calendar: http://goo.gl/x3Ogq
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mip4-multi… Vijay K. Gurbani
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mip4-m… Henrik Levkowetz
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mip4-m… Vijay K. Gurbani
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mip4-m… Jari Arkko