[Gen-art] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-lime-yang-connectionless-oam-methods-09

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Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
Review result: Ready with Issues

Gen-ART *Last Call* review of draft-ietf-lime-yang-connectionless-oam-methods-09

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Document: draft-ietf-lime-yang-connectionless-oam-methods-09.txt
Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
Review Date: 2017-10-14
IETF LC End Date: 2017-10-25
IESG Telechat date: 2017-10-26

Summary: Ready with issues
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Comment:
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The shepherd says:

> This includes at least two different implementations of
> the model, as well as product and demos at Bits-n-Bytes.

Shouldn't WGs make routine use of BCP 205, RFC 7942 "Improving
Awareness of Running Code: The Implementation Status Section"?

Minor Issues:
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In the following:

         |  +--ro min-delay-value?         uint32
         |  +--ro max-delay-value?         uint32
         |  +--ro average-delay-value?     uint32
         +--ro session-jitter-statistics
         |  +--ro time-resolution-value?   identityref
         |  +--ro min-jitter-value?        uint32
         |  +--ro max-jitter-value?        uint32
         |  +--ro average-jitter-value?    uint32

what are the units for the delay-value and jitter-value
elements, and what definition of 'jitter' is intended?


  identity protocol-id-internet {
    base protocol-id;
    description
      "Internet Protocols.";
  }

It isn't clear what "Internet Protocols" means. It seems totally non-specific.

Nits:
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  identity protocol-id-propreitary {
    base protocol-id;
    description
      "Propreitary protocol (eg.,IP SLA).";

s/propreitary/proprietary/
s/Propreitary/Proprietary/