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Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-intarea-frag-fragile-13

Donald Eastlake <d3e3e3@gmail.com> Fri, 05 July 2019 18:05 UTC

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From: Donald Eastlake <d3e3e3@gmail.com>
Date: Fri, 05 Jul 2019 14:05:34 -0400
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To: Fred Baker <fredbaker.ietf@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-intarea-frag-fragile-13
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Hi,

On Fri, Jul 5, 2019 at 1:03 PM Fred Baker <fredbaker.ietf@gmail.com> wrote:
>
> Thanks for your review. I have some points I'd like to discuss in order to understand better how to fix them.
>
> > On Jul 4, 2019, at 1:47 PM, Pete Resnick via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> wrote:
> >
> > Reviewer: Pete Resnick
> > Review result: Ready with Nits
> >
> > ...
> >
> > Nits/editorial comments:
> >
> > In Section 2.1 and 2.2, Instead of "set to one" and "set to zero", it would
> > read easier with "set to (1)" and "set to (0)", or some similar construction.
>
> That seems to me to be stylistic - I'm not at all sure what makes "(1)" more readable than "one". I'm making the change, but I can't begin to fathom how it improves the document.

I don't care between "one" and "1" or "zero" and "0" (although it
should be consistent) but I find that the addition of these
parenthesis distracting and confusing. Perhaps they are being
recommended for consistency with the result of the document. I think
the document would be improved without them and further improved with
their removal in other instances where they already occur.

Thanks,
Donald
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