[Gen-art] review of http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-l3vpn-rt-constrain-02.txt
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Review of: http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-l3vpn-rt-constrain-02.txt This document seems like it is ready, but much of this technology is outside of my knowledge bas. I think that there are some things to be addressed: Issues: 1) Abstract full of acronyms, please expand. 2) Desperately needs a terminology section, as some of the terminology is quite specific to VPN technology. I'd recommend a document revision with the above 2 points addressed. John _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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