Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07

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From: Chandrasekar Ramachandran <csekar@juniper.net>
To: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>, Theresa Enghardt <theresa@inet.tu-berlin.de>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07
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Hi Alissa,
I have responded to the comments and will address them in the next version of the document.

Thanks,
Chandra.


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> -----Original Message-----
> From: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>;
> Sent: Tuesday, December 3, 2019 11:52 PM
> To: Theresa Enghardt <theresa@inet.tu-berlin.de>;
> Cc: General Area Review Team <gen-art@ietf.org>;; last-call@ietf.org; draft-
> ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr.all@ietf.org; mpls@ietf.org
> Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07
> 
> Theresa, thanks for your review. I entered a No Objection ballot and
> requested a response to your review.
> 
> Alissa
> 
> 
> > On Oct 30, 2019, at 5:42 AM, Theresa Enghardt via Datatracker
> <noreply@ietf.org>; wrote:
> >
> > Reviewer: Theresa Enghardt
> > Review result: Ready with Nits
> >
> > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
> > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by
> > the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like
> > any other last call comments.
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> > Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07
> > Reviewer: Theresa Enghardt
> > Review Date: 2019-10-30
> > IETF LC End Date: 2019-11-05
> > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
> >
> > Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits
> > that should be fixed before publication.
> >
> > Major issues: None.
> >
> > Minor issues: None.
> >
> > Nits/editorial comments:
> >
> > The abstract is hard to parse and could be improved by fixing the
> > following nits.
> >
> > OLD: "Facility backup method allows"
> > NEW: "The facility backup method allows"
> >
> > OLD: "The many-to-one nature of local repair technique"
> > NEW: "The many-to-one nature of this local repair technique"
> >
> > OLD: "This document enumerates facility backup procedures in RFC 4090"
> > NEW: "This document enumerates the facility backup procedures in RFC
> > 4090" [or "several facility backup procedures", if not all procedures
> > are enumerated here]
> >
> > OLD: "and hence make facility backup method refresh-interval
> dependent."
> > NEW: "and hence make the facility backup method refresh-interval
> dependent."
> >
> > OLD: "The RSVP-TE extensions defined in this document will enhance"
> > NEW: "This document defines RSVP-TE extensions to enhance"
> >
> > Are "facility backup method", "facility backup procedure" and
> > "facility backup protection mechanism" all the same thing? Please
> > consider using only a single term to avoid confusion.
> >
> > Please double-check the use of definite and indefinite articles in the
> > rest of the document as well.
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