[Gen-art] Re: review of draft-ietf-avt-ulp-21.txt

Hi Francis,

Thank you very much for the summary. I will put them together with other
changes we would like to make for the RFC editors.

Thanks,

Adam

Francis Dupont wrote:
> I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
> reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
> http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
>
> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
> you may receive.
>
>
> Document: draft-ietf-avt-ulp-21.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date:  2007-03-15
> IETF LC End Date: 2007-04-03
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
>
> Summary: Ready
>
> Comments: I have only a few minor editorial comments (which should be handled
> by the RFC editor):
>  - 5 page 8 (section title): the usage is to put no space before a colon ":"
>  in English. BTW I believe the best should be:
>  "5. Uneven Level Protection (ULP)"
>
>  - 5 page 8: In stead -> Instead ?
>
>  - 7.3 page 11: in
>   "The P recovery field, the X recovery field, the CC recovery field,
>    the M recovery field, and the PT recovery field are obtained via the
>    protection operation applied to the P, X, CC, M, and PT values of
>    the media packets associated with the FEC packet."
>   it should be fine to add the P, X, ... and PT are names of RTP fields.
>
>  - 11 page 28: a word seems to miss in
>   "The changing of encryption keys is another crucial issue needs to be
>    addressed."
>
>  - 17 pages 39 and 40: I know where the problem (again) comes from so
>   I don't expect a solution for this document in particular:
>    * to put a status like "(Proposed Standard)" is not standard
>    * for a BCP the BCP number should be added
>    * RFC 3388 has no status (it is right but not as the others?)
>   So the RFC editor will have to reformat the references...
>
> Regards
>
> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
>
> PS: I have not checked all the numerical examples (not a job for a human :-).
>   

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