[Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review: draft-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast-14

Mary Barnes <mary.ietf.barnes@gmail.com> Fri, 14 December 2012 20:55 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast-14
Reviewer:  Mary Barnes
Review Date:  14 Dec 2012
IETF LC End Date: 19 Dec 2012

Summary:  Ready with comment/nits.

Minor comments:

- There is a normative downref to RFC 1321.  Does this need to be a
normative reference? Note, I could not find the shepherd write-up in
the tracker to see if this had been noted and explained.

IDNITS identifies the following:
- there are 15 instances of two long of lines
- there is an obsolete reference to RFC 2236 (Obsoleted by RFC 3376)
- there are a number of unused references that can likely be removed.

- General: please add #s to all the figures

- Section 4.1.3, 1st sentence: shouldn't "relay services gateways" be
"relay services gateway"

- Appendix A.1, 2nd paragraph:  "Section Section 5.3.6" -> "Section 5.3.6"