Re: [Gen-art] Review: draft-ietf-ipsecme-ddos-protection-09

[Jari Arkko <[e-mail]>]

Many thanks for the review, Lucy!

Authors, do take note of the comments.

Jari

On 24 Sep 2016, at 00:28, Lucy yong <[e-mail]> wrote:

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> Document: draft-ietf-ipsecme-ddos-protection-09
>      Multi-Path Time Synchronization
> Reviewer: Lucy Yong
> Review Date: 23-Sept-2016
> IETF LC End Date: 28-Sept-2016
> IESG Telechat date: 29-Sept-2016
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> Summary: This document is nearly ready for publication as a standard track RFC. Some minor comments. Some nits need to be corrected.
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> PS: comment for IESG. The document specifies puzzles approach and related protocol to boost the difficulty for DDoS attacks. The protocol description is simple and short; however it spends many pages (section 7) to describe the processes at the Initiator and the Responder. Maybe in future IETF can consider accepting protocol software code in a RFC. This will be easier for author and no need for programmers to read the description and program it (sure they will not come out the same program logic).
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> Major issues: N/A
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> Minor issues:
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> Section 1: 2nd paragraph, bot-nets,
> Comment: what is the bot-nets?
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> Section 7.1.1.2, 1st paragraph
> Comment: “that must be used”, should it be “that MUST be used” or “that is used”?
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> Nits/editorial comments:
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> Section 6:
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> s/the puzzle difficulty should/the puzzle difficulty SHOULD/
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> s/This will This will/This will/
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> Section 7.1
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> s/the IKE Responder should/the IKE Responder SHOULD/
> s/that puzzles/puzzles/
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> Section 7.1.1.1
> s/next to/nearly/
> s/the level should/the level SHOULD/
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> Section 7.1.1.2
> s/([RFC7696])/[RFC7696]/
> s/with another, and negotiate/with another and negotiate/
> s/an SA payload, containing/an SA payload containing/
> s/this type must/this type MUST/
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> Section 7.1.1.3
> s/should/SHOULD/ (3 places)
> s/blob/block/
> s/may continue to generate/MAY continually generate/
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> Section 7.1.3
> s/the solution to the puzzle contain/the puzzle solution contains/
> s/i.e./i.e.,/ (2 places)
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> Section 7.1.4
> s/must/MUST/ (2 places)
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> Section 7.2
> s/The Responder should/The Responder SHOULD/
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> Section 7.2.2
> s/message, containing/message containing/
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> Section 7.2.4
> s/operations i.e.  computing/operations, i.e., computing/
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> Section 8.1
> s/PRF must/PRF MUST/
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> Section 9
> s/Initiators should/Initiators SHOULD/
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> Section 10
> s/Care must/Care MUST/
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