Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-mboned-ieee802-mcast-problems-09

[Alissa Cooper <[e-mail]>]

Pete, thanks for your review. I merged several of your comments into my DISCUSS ballot along with a couple others.

Alissa


> On Oct 14, 2019, at 4:44 PM, Pete Resnick via Datatracker <[e-mail]> wrote:
> 
> Reviewer: Pete Resnick
> Review result: On the Right Track
> 
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> Document: draft-ietf-mboned-ieee802-mcast-problems-09
> Reviewer: Pete Resnick
> Review Date: 2019-10-14
> IETF LC End Date: 2019-10-14
> IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
> 
> Summary:
> 
> This document has good information and analysis of multicast problems and is
> certainly valuable. However, there are some things in the document which could
> use clarification or editing.
> 
> Major issues:
> 
> The first paragraph of section 8 really has too little useful comment. There is
> no reference for 802.1ak, the reference to 802.1Q is inline instead of in the
> references section, and the content of neither of these standards is explained
> in this document. The paragraph doesn't really lay out what the topic of
> discussion is, at least for someone like myself who is not versed in the topic.
> I really think this needs to be addressed.
> 
> Minor issues:
> 
> (Some of these issues are more or less "minor".)
> 
> Section 3.1.4 seems a little thin to this non-expert. It is certainly true that
> "every station has to be configured to wake up to receive the multicast", but
> it seems like only a poorly designed protocol would create the situation where
> "the received packet may ultimately be discarded" on any kind of regular basis.
> If there are a class of packets that the receiver will ultimately discard, that
> sounds like they should be on a separate multicast address, or the sender
> should be determining if the packet will be discarded before sending it.
> Perhaps what this section is driving at is that multicast protocols are often
> designed without taking power-saving considerations into account, but then
> *that's* what this section should probably talk about. As it is, it sounds like
> the old joke about saying to the doctor, "My arm hurts when I do this" and the
> doctor replying, "The stop doing that".
> 
> In section 3.2.1, the last paragraph is missing a bunch of information:
> "It's often the first service that operators drop": What is "it"?
> "Multicast snooping" is not defined.
> In what scenario are devices "registering"?
> 
> Section 3.2.2: "This intensifies the impact of multicast messages that are
> associated to the mobility of a node." I don't understand why. Are you simply
> saying that as the number of addresses goes up, more discovery packets must be
> sent?
> 
> Section 3.2.4: This seems like more of general problem than a
> multicast-specific one, and as described it sounds like an attack rather than a
> poor outcome of a protocol design decision like the rest of the examples.
> Perhaps framing it that way would make the section clearer.
> 
> Section 4.4: Which problem in section 3 is 4.4 supposed to address?
> 
> Section 5.1: "...and sometimes the daemons just seem to stop, requiring a
> restart of the daemon and causing disruption." What a strange thing to say.
> Does this simply mean "and the current implementations are buggy"?
> 
> Also section 5.1: "The distribution of users on wireless networks / subnets
> changes from one IETF meeting to the next". This document doesn't seem to be
> about the IETF meeting network. This sentence seems inappropriately specific.
> The "NAT" and "Stateful firewalls" sections are also overly specific to the
> IETF meeting network. Generalizing would help.
> 
> 7: This section seems quite thin, and perhaps unnecessary. The recommendations
> are implicit in the previous sections.
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> 
> Section 3.2.4: The mention of the face-to-face (probably better: "plenary")
> meeting seems unnecessary.
> 
> Section 5.1: Numbering the subsections would probably be useful.
> 
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