[Gendispatch] AD review of draft-halpern-gendispatch-consensusinformational-01

[Alissa Cooper <[e-mail]>]

I have reviewed this document in preparation for IETF last call. The document is almost ready for IETF LC but there are a couple of substantive issues I’d like to discuss and some nits to be resolved. This document is AD-sponsored but I’ve cc’ed the gendispatch list for transparency.

=== Substantive comments ===

I tend to think this document needs to update RFC 7841 Section A.2.2, which is about document boilerplate, or otherwise indicate the new understanding that replaces this text in that section:
'The text that follows is stream dependent -- these are initial values
   and may be updated by stream definition document updates and recorded
   by the IAB on the web page.

   IETF Stream:  "This document is a product of the Internet Engineering
      Task Force (IETF)."

      If there has been an IETF consensus call per IETF process, this
      additional text should be added: "It represents the consensus of
      the IETF community.  It has received public review and has been
      approved for publication by the Internet Engineering Steering
      Group (IESG)."  If there has not been such a consensus call, then
      this simply reads: "It has been approved for publication by the
      Internet Engineering Steering Group (IESG)."'
= Section 4 =

(1) "The IESG has issued a statement saying that no document will be issued without first conducting an IETF Last Call.” Which statement is that? I found https://ietf.org/about/groups/iesg/statements/last-call-guidance/ but it doesn’t make the claim above.

(2) Related to my comment above about RFC 7841, I think for the purposes of IETF last call, the last paragraph of this section should be removed. If this draft does not end up getting published as an RFC, we can work out a way to get the boilerplate updated to be more clear about documents being published without consensus.

=== Nits ===

= Abstract =

s/IEtF/IETF/

s/this updates/this document updates/

= Section 1 =

s/IETF procedures, as defined by [RFC2026 <https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc2026>]/IETF procedures as defined by [RFC2026 <https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc2026>]/