Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-native-nat-traversal-15

Tom Henderson <tomhend@u.washington.edu> Tue, 14 March 2017 18:20 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-native-nat-traversal-15
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On Tue, 14 Mar 2017, Miika Komu wrote:

> Hi Tom,
>
> On 02/19/2017 05:18 PM, Tom Henderson wrote:
>> Hello, I have read the latest (-17) draft and sent some purely editorial
>> comments to Miika.  I had a few non-editorial questions and comments.
>
> thanks for the feedback. I fixed the editorial issues in version 18:
>
> There's also a htmlized version available at:
> https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-hip-native-nat-traversal-18
>
> A diff from the previous version is available at:
> https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-hip-native-nat-traversal-18
>
> I did not fix these (because I would prefer to keep the artwork small):
>
> * Figure acronym un-abbreviations were not included
> * ISPI and OSPI acronyms remain
>
> (Also, if we use long parameter names in figures, I think all names should be 
> long, not just mobility related)

Miika, as I was preparing those editorial comments and I read onward, I realized that addressing some of my comments might raise some internal consistency issues, or cause some more significant editing, so I am fine if you decide that they are too disruptive.

- Tom