Re: [hrpc] draft-irtf-hrpc-association-02

[Joseph Lorenzo Hall <[e-mail]>]

On Thu, Mar 28, 2019 at 9:45 AM Mallory Knodel <[e-mail]>
wrote:

> Hi all,
>
> Some additional points just before we all meet about this very soon:
> ...
>
> Another point on structure: I would like to know from the group,
> especially folks who have yet to send in their comments, what you think
> could be done with the two discussion sections at the end to either
> bring those into the case studies or further up in the text, or if they
> should remain but perhaps pull in earlier sections. To me they seem
> disconnected. I would like to finishing reading the document with a
> better analytical understanding and not be left with huge open
> questions. I guess a considerations section would help with that, too.
>

I actually like those sections where they are... Section 7 is great
although I will comment it's a bit strong about having "established" a
relationship (which is related to causality, on which I agree with Avri and
have a bunch more to say). Section 8 is a bit unclear to me although I see
that it is trying to say that while the Internet is a place that has the
capacity to support association there are increasing factors that make that
exceedingly complex.

As I'll say in my review, I really like how 6.1.1. breaks out specific
pieces of the association analysis and it might be good to do that across
all the cases in an aggregate way in Section 8 to remind the reader what
they just read and lend support for the case that section is making.

best, Joe

PS: I've done my review but want to de-dup with Avri's before sending... I
can just send if folks want that before HRPC session! Again, so very very
sorry for such a late review close to the meeting.

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