Re: Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-httpbis-priority-11: (with COMMENT)

[Lucas Pardue <[e-mail]>]

Hi Lars,

Thanks for these. I've addressed them in
https://github.com/httpwg/http-extensions/pull/1870

Cheers
Lucas

On Thu, Dec 16, 2021 at 2:38 PM Lars Eggert via Datatracker <
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> Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for
> draft-ietf-httpbis-priority-11: No Objection
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> Thanks to Maria Ines Robles for their General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
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> All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may
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> Section 1. , paragraph 3, nit:
> > have their own needs that are independent from client needs, so they
> often co
> >                               ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
> The usual collocation for "independent" is "of", not "from". Did you mean
> "independent of"?
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> Section 1. , paragraph 4, nit:
> > s as input into prioritization decision making. The design and
> implementatio
> >                                ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
> The noun "decision-making" (= the process of deciding something) is spelled
> with a hyphen.
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> Section 5. , paragraph 4, nit:
> > ream, allowing them to be sent independent from the stream that carries
> the r
> >                                ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
> The usual collocation for "independent" is "of", not "from". Did you mean
> "independent of"?
>
> Section 7.2. , paragraph 9, nit:
> > ded value. This is different from the the request header field, in which
> omi
> >                                   ^^^^^^^
> Two determiners in a row. Choose either "the" or "the".
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> Section 8. , paragraph 9, nit:
> >  SHOULD be served by sharing bandwidth amongst them. Incremental
> resources a
> >                                    ^^^^^^^
> Do not mix variants of the same word ("amongst" and "among") within a
> single
> text.
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> Section 10. , paragraph 3, nit:
> > t generation order might lead to sub-optimal results at the client, as
> early
> >                                  ^^^^^^^^^^^
> This word is normally spelled as one.
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> Section 13.2. , paragraph 2, nit:
> > n registers the following entry in the the Hypertext Transfer Protocol
> (HTTP)
> >                                    ^^^^^^^
> Two determiners in a row. Choose either "the" or "the".
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> These URLs point to tools.ietf.org, which is being deprecated:
>  * http://tools.ietf.org/agenda/83/slides/slides-83-httpbis-5.pdf
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