p7: editorial suggestions

Mark Nottingham <mnot@mnot.net> Tue, 23 April 2013 03:48 UTC

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* 2.1 "It uses an extensible, case-insensitive token..."  I know what's meant here, but the token itself isn't extensible; it's an extension point. Suggest: :It uses a case-insensitive token as a means to identify..."

* 2.1 "...based upon a challenge received from the server..." --> "...based upon a challenge received in a response"  ("from the server" implies that the next inbound server generated the challenge, which isn't always the case).

* 2.2 "Note that there can be multiple challenges with the same auth-scheme..." --> "Note that a response can have multiple challenges..."

* 2.2 "Unless otherwise defined by the authentication scheme,..." --> "Unless specifically allowed by the authentication scheme..."

* 2.3.1 "... can only be used once per challenge/credentials."  --> "...once in a challenge or credential."

* 2.3.1 needs references to p6 for cache-control directives it talks about.

* 3.1 "The client MAY repeat the request with a new or replaced Authorisation header field."  s/client/user agent/

* 4.1 'The "Authorization" header field allows a user agent to authenticate itself with a server..."   s/server/origin server/

* 4.3 "Its value consists of credentials containing the authentication information of the user agent for the proxy..."   s/user agent/client/

* 6.2 First paragraph - all instances of 'server' to 'origin server'

* 6.2 "This is of particular concern when a server hosts resources for multiple parties..."   s/server/origin server/

* 6.2 "...by using a different host name for each party."   s/host name/origin/   (or similar; i.e. you can do this with ports too)

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