Re: AD Review of draft-ietf-httpbis-client-cert-field-04

[Brian Campbell <[e-mail]>]

Hi Francesca,

I've submitted a -05 that incorporates this and Genart review feedback:
https://lists.w3.org/Archives/Public/ietf-http-wg/2023JanMar/0185.html



On Tue, Feb 7, 2023 at 3:28 PM Brian Campbell <[e-mail]>
wrote:

> Thanks Francesca,
>
> Some followup comments/questions are inline below.
>
> On Mon, Feb 6, 2023 at 9:42 AM Francesca Palombini <
> [e-mail]> wrote:
>
>> # AD Review of draft-ietf-httpbis-client-cert-field-04
>>
>> cc @fpalombini
>>
>>
>>
>> Thank you for this document.
>>
>>
>>
>> No major comments from me, only one comment around a normative MUST and
>> some nits, which you can address together with any other last call comments.
>>
>>
>>
>> I also note that the consensus of the wg is for it to be informational,
>> which is fine since I understand this document is meant to be the reference
>> specification for two IANA registrations that are "specification required",
>> but it read to me as a standard track doc. As the wg has discussed and
>> gotten consensus around informational, I don't expect any change, just
>> bringing it up one last time before LC since I expect there might be more
>> comments in LC and IESG eval.
>>
>>
>>
>> ## Comments
>>
>>
>>
>> ### MUST prevent unintended use
>>
>>
>>
>> Section 4:
>>
>> > Therefore, steps MUST be taken to prevent unintended use, both in
>> sending the header field and in relying on its value.
>>
>>
>>
>> This might simply be a formulation problem, but when I read it I am not
>> sure this is a MUST the reader will know how to implement.
>>
>
> The idea with that sentence was that the 'how' is described in the rest of
> the section. The keyword MUST probably isn't appropriate there. And a bit
> more context might be useful too. Would changing it to this sentence
> address that formulation problem? Or maybe I'm missing your point...
>
> "Therefore, steps such as those described below need to be taken to
> prevent unintended use, both in sending the header field and in relying on
> its value."
>
>
>>
>>
>> ## Nits
>>
>>
>>
>> ### Editorial nits
>>
>>
>>
>> Section 4:
>>
>> > The configuration options and request sanitization are necessarily
>> functionally of the respective servers.
>>
>>
>>
>> s/necessarily functionally/necessary functions ?
>>
>
> Either works I think :) But I'll change it.
>
>
>
>> ### Considerations considered
>>
>>
>>
>> Funny title for Appendix B :) Where are the considerations not considered?
>>
>
> It was actually intended to be somewhat humorous. :)  I was trying to
> convey something like "these are some things that were considered" to
> hopefully avoid questions about whether they'd been considered. Kind of
> like a FAQ for the general approach taken by the document. Also I didn't
> feel great about other potential titles there. But I can see how the title
> doesn't look great. I know this sounds silly but I'm not sure what the
> section title should be. Maybe "Document Considerations" "General
> Considerations" or "Design Considerations"? Or something else that I'm not
> able to think of?
>
>
>
>>

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