Re: [i2rs] [RTG-DIR] RtgDir Early review: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-dc-fabric-network-topology-03.txt

["Susan Hares" <[e-mail]>]

Matt:

 

Would you please review version-04 , and let me know if you feel it resolves all your comments?  We’re planning to send this to the AD after you confirm it resolves your comments. 

 

Sue 

 

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Subject: Re: [RTG-DIR] RtgDir Early review: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-dc-fabric-network-topology-03.txt

 

Hi Bocci,

 

Thanks for your comments. We’ve uploaded the new version -04 and believe it resolve your comments.

 

Many thanks to people’s kind help on this new version : ).

 

Best Regards,

 

Yan

 

From: Bocci, Matthew (Nokia - GB) [mailto:[e-mail]] 
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Subject: RtgDir Early review: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-dc-fabric-network-topology-03.txt

 

Hello,

 

I have been selected to do a routing directorate “early” review of this draft:

https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-dc-fabric-network-topology/

 

The routing directorate will, on request from the working group chair,

perform an “early” review of a draft before it is submitted for

publication to the IESG. The early review can be performed at any time

during the draft’s lifetime as a working group document. The purpose of

the early review depends on the stage that the document has reached.

 

As this document is in working group last call, my focus for the review

was to determine whether the document is ready to be published. Please

consider my comments along with the other working group last call

comments.

 

For more information about the Routing Directorate, please see

​http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir

 

Document: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-dc-fabric-network-topology-03.txt

Reviewer: Matthew Bocci 

Review Date: 5th January 2018 

Intended Status: Standards Track

 

Summary:

 

I have significant concerns about this document. It needs more work

before being submitted to the IESG.

 

Comments:

 

The rationale for this document is clear and I did not note any major

technical comments. However, one major comment that I have is that the

English grammar and usage is poor in some sections, and it is missing

normal English articles in some places (a, an, the,…), making it hard to

read. I would suggest that the authors go through the draft with a

native English speaker to help resolve these before handing the draft to

the IESG.