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<mohamed.boucadair@orange.com> Mon, 27 January 2014 08:31 UTC

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To: Roni Even <ron.even.tlv@gmail.com>, "draft-ietf-pcp-description-option.all@tools.ietf.org" <draft-ietf-pcp-description-option.all@tools.ietf.org>
Date: Mon, 27 Jan 2014 09:31:06 +0100
Subject: RE: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-pcp-description-option-03
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Dear Roni,
Thank you for the review.
Please see inline.
Cheers,
Med
De : Roni Even [mailto:ron.even.tlv@gmail.com]
Envoyé : dimanche 26 janvier 2014 09:13
À : draft-ietf-pcp-description-option.all@tools.ietf.org
Cc : ietf@ietf.org; gen-art@ietf.org
Objet : Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-pcp-description-option-03

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

Document:  draft-ietf-pcp-description-option-03

Reviewer: Roni Even

Review Date:2014-1-26

IETF LC End Date: 2014-2-4

IESG Telechat date:



Summary: This draft is almost ready for publication as a standard track RFC.





Major issues:



Minor issues:



1.       I am not sure what the use of the "description" option is. I can see how to create one but as for usage the only text I can see is "Querying the PCP server to get the description text of an existing mapping is out of scope." I think that the document should provide information about the purpose of this option.

[Med] The main usage is for a user to associate a textual description with a mapping. This is captured by this text "   This option can be used by a user (or an application) to indicate a
   description associated with a given mapping such as "FTP server", "My
   remote access to my CP router", "Camera", "Network attached storage
   serve", etc.

"


Nits/editorial comments:

 1.  The IANA section should provide enough information to fill the registry http://www.iana.org/assignments/pcp-parameters/pcp-parameters.xml#options
[Med] Required information as per RFC6887 is provided in http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-pcp-description-option-03#section-2.

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