Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-vcarddav-webdav-mkcol-05

["Spencer Dawkins" <[e-mail]>]

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Document: draft-ietf-vcarddav-webdav-mkcol-05
Reviewer: Spencer Dawkins
IETF LC End Date: 2009-08-17
Review Date: 2009-08-07
IESG Telechat date: (not known)

Summary: This document is almost ready for publication as a Proposed 
Standard. I have some minor comments (identified as "Spencer (minor)" in the 
following text, but nothing that should slow document approval. In 
particular, I'm pretty sure I identified an error in the title for Section 
3.5 below.

Comments identified as "Spencer (clarity)" are provided for editors, but are 
not part of the Gen-ART review.

Abstract

   This specification extends the Web Distributed Authoring and
   Versioning (WebDAV) MKCOL method to allow collections of arbitrary
   resourcetype to be created and to allow properties to be set at the
   same time.

Spencer (clarity): I know that RFC 4918 didn't provide an expansion for 
MKCOL until about page 46 (or maybe 25, in passing), but since MKCOL appears 
in the abstract for this document, it might be helpful to s/MKCOL/MKCOL 
("Make Collection")/ here. MKCOL is defined at first use in the 
Introduction, so that's fine - this is only a suggestion about the abstract.

3.  WebDAV extended MKCOL

   The WebDAV MKCOL request is extended to allow the inclusion of a
   request body.  The request body is an XML document containing a
   single DAV:mkcol XML element as the root element.  The Content-Type

Spencer (minor): if I'm reading this paragraph correctly, I'd suggest "The 
request body is an XML document that MUST contain a single DAV:mkcol XML 
element as the root element" here - the last sentence in this paragraph 
makes me think the requirement is normative, but it doesn't look normative 
to 2119 scanners :-)

   request header MUST be set appropriately for an XML body (e.g., set
   to "text/xml" or "application/xml").  XML-typed bodies for an MKCOL
   request that do not have DAV:mkcol as the root element are reserved
   for future usage.

   As per the PROPPATCH method ([RFC4918], Section 9.2), servers MUST
   process any DAV:set instructions in document order (an exception to
   the normal rule that ordering is irrelevant).  Instructions MUST
   either all be executed or none executed.  Thus, if any error occurs

Spencer (clarity): this sentence reads roughly to me, and it's 2119 
language, so needs to be clear. I suggest "The set of instructions MUST be 
executed atomically; either all are executed or none are executed".

   during processing, all executed instructions MUST be undone and a
   proper error result returned.  Failure to set a property value on the
   collection MUST result in a failure of the overall MKCOL request -
   i.e. the collection is not created.

3.5.  Example: Successful Extended MKCOL Request

Spencer (minor): Perhaps this should be s/Successful/Unsuccessful/? It's 
returning a 403/424 :D

4.  Replacing Existing MKxxx Methods

Spencer (clarity): Hmm. This section (and 4.1, and 4.1.1) aren't quite about 
REPLACING existing MKxxx methods, but more like "Providing MKxxx 
functionality using extended MKCOL". Would that be clearer? The current text 
in 4.1 sent me looking to see whether "replacement" meant "deprecation" (it 
doesn't, if I'm reading clearly), for example.

   One of the goals of this extension is to eliminate the need for other
   extensions to define their own variant of MKCOL to create the special
   collections they need.  This extension can be used to replace
   existing MKxxx methods in other extensions as detailed below.  If a
   server supports this extension and the other extension listed, then
   the server MUST support use of the extended MKCOL method to achieve
   the same result as the MKxxx method of the other extension.