Re: Genart telechat review of draft-turner-est-extensions-08

[Sean Turner <[e-mail]>]

> On Jul 11, 2017, at 00:15, Vijay Gurbani <[e-mail]> wrote:
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> Reviewer: Vijay Gurbani
> Review result: Ready with Nits
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> Document: draft-turner-est-extensions-??
> Reviewer: Vijay Gurbani
> Review Date: 2017-07-10
> IETF LC End Date: 2017-07-11
> IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
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> Summary: Ready with nits.
> 
> Major issues: 0
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> Minor issues: 1
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> Nits/editorial comments: 2
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> Minor:
> - S2, I understand that a PAL may be represented as a XML file or a JSON
> object, but I note that the underlying semantic content of the resource,
> irrespective of representation as shown in Sections 2.1.2 and 2.1.3 is
> different.  I suspect that is by design, but could not figure out why the
> XML and JSON resource would have different semantic content.

s2.1.2 is XML schema.  There’s no schema in JSON so that’s why there a little different.

> Nits:
> - S1, top of page 5: What is TA?  The expansion is not defined before being
> used here for the first time; I suspect it is "Trust Anchor", but may help
> to expand it here rather than in S7.

TA = Trust Anchor - it’s expanded on p4 in the /crls bullet. ;)

> - S1.1, "air gap" --- I understand what it means from rfc4949, but someone
> not familiar (or too lazy to look up rfc4949 or simply much too younger than
> us) may assume that "air gap" refers to "wifi".  Admittedly in 2007 when
> rfc4949 was written, 802.11{g,e,n} were just released [1], and only three
> years before, in 2004, Economist predicted that the worldwide market for WiFi
> devices in 2006 will be 50 million (!) [2].
> 
> I don't know that we can do much here, but it was with some chuckle that
> the term "air gap" lead me to the statistics I mention above.

Yeah I wondered whether people would know what that was, but I could put in an reference reference to 4949 to make sure people know what I mean.

spt

> [1] http://www.ucopia.com/en/news/history-of-wi-fi/
> [2] http://www.economist.com/node/2724397
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