Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-sipping-pending-additions-04.txt
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Gonzalo, I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-sipping-pending-additions-04.txt Reviewer: David L. Black Review Date: 29 February 2008 IESG Telechat date: 06 March 2008 Summary: This draft is on the right track, but has open issues, described in the review. Comments: The following two issues noted the Gen-ART review of the -03 version of this draft do not appear to have been addressed in the -04 version. [1] 5.1.2. SUBSCRIBE Bodies A SUBSCRIBE for Pending Additions events MAY contain a body. This body would serve the purpose of filtering the subscription. The definition of such a body is outside the scope of this specification. How is that supposed to be interoperable? A better approach would be to prohibit bodies now and allow a future specification to define them. [2] 5.1.7. Subscriber Processing of NOTIFY Requests NOTIFY requests contain full state. The subscriber does not need to perform any type of information aggregation. This text doesn't explain "the process followed by the subscriber upon receipt of a NOTIFY request, including any logic required to form a coherent resource state (if applicable)" (see Section 4.4.8 of RFC 3265). This text needs to be rewritten and expanded. The -04 draft addresses the partial notification case, but not the full notification case, unless Section 6.2 was intended to cover all notification processing, in which case it has the wrong title. idnits 2.08.04 ran clean aside from finding a couple of referenced Internet-Drafts that have revised versions. The RFC Editor will remove the version numbers in any case, so it's not important to correct them. Thanks, --David ---------------------------------------------------- David L. Black, Distinguished Engineer EMC Corporation, 176 South St., Hopkinton, MA 01748 +1 (508) 293-7953 FAX: +1 (508) 293-7786 black_david@emc.com Mobile: +1 (978) 394-7754 ---------------------------------------------------- _______________________________________________ IETF mailing list IETF@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ietf