FW: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-enum-calendar-service-03.txt

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This draft has not been revised since it was reviewed in
August.  It is still basically ready for publication, but
has nits that should be fixed before publication.

An RFC Editor Note should be used to correct the bad section
reference (see below), and the IESG should ensure that this
correction is communicated to IANA, as it affects the
registration that IANA will perform.

Thanks,
--David
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Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-enum-calendar-service-03.txt

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.


Document: draft-ietf-enum-calendar-service-03.txt
Reviewer: David Black
Review Date: 24 August 2007
IETF LC End Date: 6 September 

Summary:
This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits
that should be fixed before publication.

Comments:
This is a relatively straightforward registration of an ENUM
service, and the draft does a good job of explaining the
service that is being registered.  I found one minor
nit in the service registration (Section 2):

   Security considerations:
      See section 3.

That should be "See section 4." as section 3 contains examples
and section 4 is the Security Considerations.

idnits 2.04.14 did not find any issues.

Thanks,
--David
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