[Int-dir] Intdir telechat review of draft-ietf-idr-flow-spec-v6

Donald Eastlake <d3e3e3@gmail.com> Mon, 02 November 2020 03:22 UTC

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Subject: [Int-dir] Intdir telechat review of draft-ietf-idr-flow-spec-v6
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I am an assigned INT directorate reviewer for
draft-ietf-idr-flow-spec-v6. These comments were written primarily for
the benefit of the Internet Area Directors. Document editors and
shepherd(s) should treat these comments just like they would treat
comments from any other IETF contributors and resolve them along with
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Reviewer: Donald Eastlake, III
Review Result: Ready with non-technical issues

The draft looks good technically, but:

Issues
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Section 4: Does the IETF allow direct references into github in the
main body of a standards track RFC? Looks like all the comparison code
is in the Appendix. Can the github reference at least be moved to the
Appendix?

Section 11.2: As far as I know, there are only normative and
informational references, not "URIs" references.

Editorial
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Section 1, 1st sentence: "to be also capable of supporting" -> "to
also support"

Section 1, 2nd sentence:
OLD
   This document analyzes the differences of IPv6 [RFC8200] flows
   description from those of traditional IPv4 packets and propose a
   subset of new Border Gateway Protocol [RFC4271] encoding formats to
   enable Dissemination of Flow Specification Rules
   [I-D.ietf-idr-rfc5575bis] for IPv6.
NEW
   This document analyzes the differences between describing IPv6
   [RFC8200] flows and those of traditional IPv4 packets. It specifies
   new Border Gateway Protocol [RFC4271] encoding formats to enable
   Dissemination of Flow Specification Rules [I-D.ietf-idr-rfc5575bis]
   for IPv6.

There are some other minor editorial things like plural/singular
forms but I assume the RFC Editor will fix those.

Thanks,
Donald
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