[Last-Call] Dnsdir telechat review of draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-nbiot-12

Johan Stenstam via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Tue, 11 October 2022 10:51 UTC

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Reviewer: Johan Stenstam
Review result: Ready with Nits

The document is extremely acronym dense, which makes it hard to read
for a non-expert reader. However, I do understand that this is nearly
impossible to avoid in this area.

That said, after reading this a couple of times, I think I understand
enough of the topic matter to agree with the way it is presented.

This document does not reference the DNS, and has no considerations
that reflect on the DNS.

A couple of nits, feel free to ignore:

1. 5.4.2. Fragmentation Parameters: Typo (I think): "... bigger than
   304 bits using a 16 bits- Header_size". Should be "... 16 bit
   Header_size", in analogy with prior section. 

2. 5.4.2. Fragmentation Parameters: Redundant line: "W 2 or 3 bits."

3. Both Appendix A and B has a redundant "Appendix" in the title that
   could be removed.