[Last-Call] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-lsp-ping-08

Wesley Eddy via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Sun, 09 October 2022 23:53 UTC

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Subject: [Last-Call] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-lsp-ping-08

Reviewer: Wesley Eddy
Review result: Ready

This document has been reviewed as part of the transport area review team's
ongoing effort to review key IETF documents. These comments were written
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Some comments:
(1) Is there an 'e' missing at the end of this sentence in Section 1?:
validate data plane against the control plan.
->
validate data plane against the control plane.

(2) It seems like some words are missing in this sentence in Section 4.1:
The EVPN MAC/IP Sub-TLV identifies the MAC or ARP/ND for an EVPN
->
The EVPN MAC/IP Sub-TLV identifies the target MAC address for ARP/ND for an EVPN

(3) For IP address used for examples (e.g. in Section 6.1), consider using the
documentation prefix (RFC 5737).

[Last-Call] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf… Wesley Eddy via Datatracker
Re: [Last-Call] Tsvart last call review of draft-… Parag Jain (paragj)