Re: [MBONED] draft-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast-15

Greg Bumgardner <gbumgard@gmail.com> Tue, 16 July 2013 05:33 UTC

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Thanks Bill,

So much for spell checking the document.

-g.b.

On Mon, Jul 15, 2013 at 5:59 PM, William Atwood
<william.atwood@concordia.ca> wrote:
> Greg,
>
> Here are some nits I discovered on reading the rfcdiff output:
>
> 8 lines below figure 5:
>
> "IGMPv2/MLDv2" -> "IGMPv3/MLDv2"
>
> In 4.2.1.3. Teardown Sequence, para 1, line 7:
>
> "instead relay" -> "instead rely"
>
> 7 lines above 5.3.3.4. Handling a Membership Update Message:
>
> "IGMPv2/MLDv2" -> "IGMPv3/MLDv2"
>
> (You might want to do a search for "IGMPv2/MLDv2" and swat all
> occurrences...)
>
> In 5.3.3.6.2.1. IPv4 Multicast IP Datagrams, para 1, lines 6-7:
>
> Why is [RFC1191] given twice?
>
> In 5.3.3.6.4. Handling Destination Unreachable Messages, para 1, line 7:
>
> "MUTST"=> "MUST"
>
> In 5.3.5. Response MAC Generation, bullet 2, line 1.
>
> "Tp" -> "To"
>
> Three lines above 6.2. Gateways:
>
> "On order" -> "In order"
>
> In 7.1. IPv4 and IPv6 Anycast Prefix Allocation, para 1, line 2.
>
> "as as" -> "as"
>
>   Bill
>
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