Re: [media-types] review requested: draft-turner-application-cms-media-type

[Bjoern Hoehrmann <[e-mail]>]

* Sean Turner wrote:
>In case I'm just supposed to sending the template:
>Optional parameters:
>
>   encapsulatedContent=y; where y is one or more CMS ECT
>   (Encapsulating Content Types); multiple values are encapsulated in
>   quotes and separated by a folding-whitespace comma folding-
>   whitespace.  ECT values are based on content types found in
>   [RFC3274], [RFC4073], [RFC5083], [RFC5652], and [RFC6032].  This
>   list can later be extended see Section 3.

I think the first "ECT" should be "ECTs"; I can't parse the part after
the semicolon. There should probably be a comma before "see". Same for
the next parameter.

>Security considerations:
>
>   See [RFC3370], [RFC5652], [RFC5753], and [RFC5754] for id-
>   signedData, id-envelopedData, id-digestData, id-encryptedData, id-
>   ct-authData; see [RFC5958], [RFC5959], and [RFC6162] for id-ct-KP-
>   aKeyPackage; see [RFC6031] and [RFC6160] for id-ct-KP- sKeyPackage;
>   see [RFC6032], [RFC6033], and [RFC6161] for id-ct-KP-
>   encryptedKeyPkg; see [RFC5914] for id-ct-trustAnchorList; see
>   [RFC3274] for id-compressedData; see [RFC5083] and [RFC5084] for
>   id-ct-authEnvelopedData; see [RFC4073] for id-ct-contentCollection
>   and id-ct-contentWithAttrs; see [RFC4108] for id-ct-
>   firmwarePackage, id-ct-firmwareLoadReceipt, id-ct-
>   firmwareLoadError; see [ID.housley-keypackage-receipt-n-error] for
>   id-ct-KP-keyPackageReceipt and id-ct-KP-keyPackageError.

Editorially the above is quite horrible, maybe a table to map the values
to the RFCs would be better. Also, there should be some prose to set the
context here (why would one "see" all the referenced documents, and why
are there no security considerations for the type right here, beyond the
suggestion to look elsewhere).
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