Re: [MLS] Intdir telechat review of draft-ietf-mls-architecture-10

[Benjamin Beurdouche <[e-mail]>]

Hi Tatuya,

Thanks for the review !
I have opened the following issue to track your comments.

https://github.com/mlswg/mls-architecture/issues/177 

Best,
Benjamin


> On 30 Jan 2023, at 07:46, Tatuya Jinmei via Datatracker <[e-mail]> wrote:
> 
> Reviewer: Tatuya Jinmei
> Review result: Ready with Nits
> 
> I am an assigned INT directorate reviewer for
> draft-ietf-mls-architecture-10.txt. These comments were written primarily for
> the benefit of the Internet Area Directors. Document editors and shepherd(s)
> should treat these comments just like they would treat comments from any other
> IETF contributors and resolve them along with any other Last Call comments that
> have been received. For more details on the INT Directorate, see
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/group/intdir/about/.
> 
> I've reviewed the draft in terms of issues or concerns for the Internet Area.
> I've not seen any such issues. And, overall, the document is well written and
> looks complete for publication.
> 
> The only possible nit I might note is that some technical terms such as
> "Proposal" or "Commit" messages are used without a reference or definition,
> which confused me while reviewing the draft. From a quick look at the protocol
> draft, these may be defined in that draft, but in any case, it would be more
> reader friendly if the architecture draft has a "terminology" section, listing
> some of those terms with a brief description and or a proper reference.
> 
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