Re: [MMUSIC] 4566bis-36: Minor editorial comments regarding line descriptions in section 5

Christer Holmberg <christer.holmberg@ericsson.com> Fri, 26 July 2019 17:12 UTC

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From: Christer Holmberg <christer.holmberg@ericsson.com>
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Subject: Re: [MMUSIC] 4566bis-36: Minor editorial comments regarding line descriptions in section 5
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Hi,

>It seems to me that these are all minor editorial things. Since the document has already had its IESG review I am >reluctant to make such optional changes. If I were to start I can imagine some further back and forth on the >details of the wording. But I can do these if Adam wants them.

In my opinion the changes are such minor, and pure editorial, that they don't require a new IESG review etc.

But, I'll leave it up to you to decide. I should have commented earlier, but I was overwhelmed with other drafts.

Regards,

Christer


On 7/24/19 6:13 AM, Christer Holmberg wrote:
> Hi,
> 
> I had a look at section 5, and I have a couple of minor editorial comments:
> 
> Q1:
> 
> Section 5.6. says:
> 
>     “If an email address or phone number is present, it MUST be 
> specified before the first media description.”
> 
> I don’t think we need that statement. We define elsewhere (both in 
> Section 5 and in the syntax) the order of the letters.
> 
> ---
> 
> Q2:
> 
> Section 5.4 says:
> 
> “At most one "i=" line can be used for each media description.”
> 
> …while section 5.5 says:
> 
> “This line is OPTIONAL. No more than one "u=" line is allowed per 
> session description.”
> 
> …while section 5.6 says:
> 
> “Inclusion of an email address or phone number is OPTIONAL.”
> 
> I assume “at most one” and “no more than one” means the same thing, 
> and if we want to explicitly indicate that something is OPTIONAL we 
> should use it in all places where it applies. So, I think it would be 
> good to have aligned terminology, e.g.,:
> 
> “This X line is OPTIONAL, and at most one X line can be included in a 
> media/session description”
> 
> ---
> 
> Q3:
> 
> In section 5.4 the text says twice that there can be at most one “i=” 
> line in a media description. Do we need to repeat?
> 
> Regards,
> 
> Christer
> 
> 
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