Re: [mpls] Last Call: <draft-ietf-mpls-tp-rosetta-stone-12.txt>

"Adrian Farrel" <adrian@olddog.co.uk> Thu, 03 October 2013 08:50 UTC

From: Adrian Farrel <adrian@olddog.co.uk>
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Date: Thu, 03 Oct 2013 09:48:32 +0100
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Thanks for this document which was surprisingly readable.

I have a number of comments from my AD review, but they are all
trivial and can be handled as IETF last call comments.

Thanks,
Adrian

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Nurit will want to change the minor details or her affiliation.

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Abstract
Expand MPLS-TP and PW on first use.
Expand MS
s/recommendations/Recommendations/  >>> Apply throughout document
s/nor/or/

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Section 1

s/telecommunication/Telecommunication/

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Section 1.2

s/Administration and Maintenance/Administration, and Maintenance/

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Section 3.4

s/APPENDIX/Appendix/

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Section 3.5

Please expand PW

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Section 3.7

One might ask whether a co-routed bidirectional path that traverses a
LAG or a link bundle uses the same component links in both directions.

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Section 3.8 could probably usefully mention routing along with 
signaling.

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Section 3.11

s/physical channels/a physical channel/

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Section 3.16

Please expand LSR

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One paragraph in 3.17 is a bit wild.

   Therefore, in the context of MPLS-TP LSP or PW Maintenance Entity
   (defined below) LERs and T-PEs can be MEPs while LSRs and S-PEs can
   be MIPs. In the case of Tandem Connection Maintenance Entity
   (defined below), LSRs and S-PEs can be either MEPs or MIPs.

s/context of/context of a/

"PW Maintenance Entity" is not defined below (I think).

Please expand LER

I don't find the definition of "Tandem Connection Maintenance Entity"
Maybe you could say
...the case of a Maintenance Entity for a Tandem Connection (defined below)


Please expand S-PE

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Section 3.19
Penultimate paragraph
Second instance  s/(e.g. count packets)./(e.g. counts packets)./

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Section 3.23

s/described in three ways:/described in one of three ways:/
s/Sub-Path Maintenance Element, and/Sub-Path Maintenance Element, or/
s/as a Tandem Connections./as a Tandem Connection./

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Section 3.23.2  Section header

s/(SMPE):/(SPME):/

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Section 3.35

The use of pipe ("|") and curly braces ("{" and "}") could usefully be
replaced with English language.

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Re: [mpls] Last Call: <draft-ietf-mpls-tp-rosetta… Adrian Farrel
Re: [mpls] Last Call: <draft-ietf-mpls-tp-rosetta… Huub helvoort