Re: [mpls] Shepherd review of draft-ietf-mpls-spring-inter-domain-oam-10
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Subject: Re: [mpls] Shepherd review of draft-ietf-mpls-spring-inter-domain-oam-10
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Adrian, Thank you for careful review and comments. Version -11 addresses your comments Pls see inline for responses. Juniper Business Use Only -----Original Message----- From: Adrian Farrel <adrian@olddog.co.uk> Sent: Wednesday, February 7, 2024 10:23 PM To: adrian@olddog.co.uk; draft-ietf-mpls-spring-inter-domain-oam@ietf.org Cc: mpls@ietf.org Subject: RE: [mpls] Shepherd review of draft-ietf-mpls-spring-inter-domain-oam-10 [External Email. Be cautious of content] Oh, I should add... Please be sure to clean up all of the nits reported by idnits https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://author-tools.ietf.org/api/idnits?url=https:**Awww.ietf.org*archive*id__;Ly8vLw!!NEt6yMaO-gk!B7Ff8868TaqCp1zMGGfPx37gxIVnvcUdZgT9M5drdwRi3aDww_0OxUTpWY_su3WVw7CS63GNDuYRdgSqJw$ /draft-ietf-mpls-spring-inter-domain-oam-10.txt The only things you can get away with are the things that look like references, but aren't. <SH> Worked on IDnits and the above mentioned ones are the only ones remaining. Cheers, Adrian -----Original Message----- From: mpls <mpls-bounces@ietf.org> On Behalf Of Adrian Farrel Sent: 06 February 2024 21:18 To: draft-ietf-mpls-spring-inter-domain-oam@ietf.org Cc: mpls@ietf.org Subject: [mpls] Shepherd review of draft-ietf-mpls-spring-inter-domain-oam-10 Hi, I have taken over as shepherd for your document. That necessitates me jumping in with a "slightly late" review. But I guess all reviews are helpful. If you can spin a new version, I can pass the document on to the AD. Thanks, Adrian === Throughout the document there are a number of cases of missing spaces before or after round brackets or commas. Please check and fix. --- <SH> done Abstract s/Segment Routing (SR)/The Segment Routing (SR)/ s/Autonomous Systems(AS)/Autonomous Systems (ASes)/ s/with simple/with a simple/ <SH> Done --- Please move the section on Requirements Language down to become 1.2. <SH> Done --- 1. I think this section really should start with some text and not leap in with a figure. Figure 1 is not referenced until the 3rd paragraph, so this should be easy to do. <SH> done The figure could use a key for: AS ASBR P PE PMS --- <SH> done 1. para 1 s/Autonomous Systems either/Autonomous Systems (ASes) either/ s/Segment Routing/Segment Routing (SR)/ s/Autonomous systems(AS)./ASes./ s/Identifiers(SID)/Identifiers (SIDs)/ --- 1. para 2 s/with MPLS/with an MPLS/ s/Autonomous system/AS/ s/Autonomous Systems(AS)/ASes/ --- <SH> Done 1. para 3 s/(EPE-SID)/(EPE-SIDs)/ s/For example in Figure 1/For example, in Figure 1,/ --- <sH> done 1. para 3 It is advantageous for operations to be able to perform LSP ping and traceroute procedures on these inter-AS SR-MPLS paths. - s/operations/operators/ ??? - "It is advantageous" feels a bit unsupported. What are the advantages? Perhaps "... in order to detect and diagnose failed deliveries and to determine the actual path that traffic takes through the network." --- <SH> Changed to below "It is useful for operators to be able to perform LSP ping and traceroute procedures on these inter-AS SR-MPLS paths, in order to detect and diagnose failed deliveries and to determine the actual path that traffic takes through the network." 1. You have both 'traceroute' and 'Traceroute'. Please pick one and apply it to the whole document. --- <SH> Done 1. para 4 That is because there is no IP connectivity to the source address of the ping packet, which is in a different AS from the packet's destination. I know what you mean, but as stated this is not completely true (and not always true, in any case). Maybe... That is because there might not always be IP connectivity from a responding node back to the source address of the ping packet when the responding node is in a different AS from the source of the ping. --- <SH> Thanks for the text. I have updated. 1. para 5 s/out the MPLS/out MPLS/ s/requires PMS/requires the PMS/ --- <SH> done 1. para 5 This mechanism is operationally very heavy and requires PMS to be capable of building a huge number of GRE tunnels, which may not be feasible. Presumably... This mechanism is operationally very heavy and requires the PMS to be capable of building a huge number of GRE tunnels or installing the necessary static routes, which may not be feasible. --- <SH> done 1. para 6 s/segment routing/SR/ --- <SH> done 1. para 7 s/[RFC7743] mechanism/The [RFC7743] mechanism/ s/in slow path/on the slow path/ --- <SH> done 1. para 8 This mechanism uses MPLS path and no changes are required in the forwarding path. I cannot parse this. Maybe s/MPLS path/MPLS LSPs/ ? <SH> I mean to say the packet is being forwarded via MPLS so IP connectivity is not needed. MPLS LSPs term will be too specific to LDP/RSVP I believe. SR RFCs don't use the term MPLS LSPs. --- 1. para 8 s/Reply path TLV/Reply Path TLV/ (twice) s/segment routing/SR/ (please check the rest of the doc!) --- <SH> done 1.1 Nothing wrong with what you have written, but RFC 8402 defines the term "SR domain" and distinguishes it from an "IGP domain". Upon opening your document, I was confused by your use of "domain" until: - Tony Li put me straight - I read section 1.1 I wonder whether there are ways you can make the distinction clearer sooner in the document. --- <SH> I put a forward reference in the into the "domain definition" section. Found it difficult to move it earlier. 1.1 s/Autonomous System (AS)/AS/ --- <SH> done 2. Please use Title Case for the section header. --- <SH> Done 2. Again, please don't begin the section with a figure. The text needs to make reference to the figure. --- <SH> Done 2. s/Reply path TLV/a Reply Path TLV/ s/in echo reply/in an echo reply --- <sH> done 3. OLD and PMS/Head-end NEW and a PMS/Head-end END --- <SH> Done 3. s/Reply path TLV/Reply Path TLV/ (please check the rest of the doc) s/Implementations may/Implementations MAY/ (twice) s/Command Line Interface(CLI)/Command Line Interface (CLI)/ sIPV4/IPv4/ s/dual- stack/dual-stack/ --- <SH> Done 4. OLD The motivation has been to keep the definitions same as in [RFC9256] with minimal modifications if it is needed. NEW The intention was to keep the definitions as close to those in [RFC9256] as possible, with modifications only when needed. END --- <SH> done 4. s/segment sub-TLV/Segment Sub-TLV/ (please check whole doc) --- <SH> done 4.2 Not all confusing to have TBD1, TBD3, and TBD4 (but no TBD2) :-) Aha! This is because you have a "TBA2" instead. Maybe change TBA to TBD. Except, you also have a TBA1. --- <SH> Assigned TBD1,TBD2, TBD3. Left TBA1, TBA2 as is. Hope that works for you. 4.1 The following applies to the Type-1 Segment sub-TLV: I think s/Type-1/Type-A/ Similar issues in 4.2 and 4.3. Also, the section headings should (presumably) be s/Type A/Type-A/ etc. --- <SH> done 4.1, 4.2, 4.3 Compare the requirements for the Reserved fields. Why are they different? --- <SH> Updated to " MUST be set to zero when sending; MUST be ignored on receipt." For all sections 4.2 When the Algo is present it is used to derive the Label. Is that the SID label? How does that conflict with the SID field (if present)? Ditto 4.3 --- <SH> " When the MPLS SID field is present, it MUST be used for constructing the Reply Path" This was there, I moved it in SID field description. Hope that helps. "SID: optional: 4-octet field containing label, TC, S and TTL as defined in <xref target="type1"/>. When the SID field is present, it MUST be used for constructing the Reply Path." 4.4 and 10.2 It's not illegal, it's just a bit odd that you are requesting bit 1 to be assigned and not but 0. Any reason? --- <SH> Trying to mimic what is already defined. Other bits currently defined in BGP but not applicable here. 4.4 Unused bits in the Flag octet SHOULD be set to zero upon transmission and MUST be ignored upon receipt. I think you need this to be MUST be zero on transmission. Otherwise you break the definition of new bits in the future (new bit has meaning but legacy implementation sometimes sets the bit to 1). --- <SH> agree 4.4 A-Flag applies to Segment Types C, D. If A-Flag appears with any other Segment Type, it MUST be ignored. Is this too strong? It may confuse future extensions that want to define new Segment Types and use the A flag. Perhaps all you are concerned about is the use of the A flag with Type-A segments? --- <SH> yes. Agree If A-Flag appears with Type-A Segment Type, it MUST be ignored. 5. SRv6 dataplane is not in the scope of this document and will be addressed in a separate document. Will it, though? Either s/will/may/ or delete from "and" to the end. --- <SH> changed to " SRv6 dataplane is not in the scope of this document." 6.1 In the inter-AS scenario,the procedures described in this document should be used to specify the return path. Is this "should" or "SHOULD"? You are allowing variation (by using should not must) so you need to say why an implementation/deployment would choose to do something different. --- <SH> The inter-AS deployment may not need procedures from this doc if ip connectivity to the initiator is available. That’s why the first statement Is not normative. 6.1 has several acceptable uses of "MUST". But I don't find what a receiver should do if one of these is violated. For example, LSP ping initiator MUST set the Reply Mode of the echo request to 5 So, it the receiver sets a Reply Mode set to another value, what happens? 6.2 might cover this, but doesn't quite. --- <SH> If reply mode 5 is not set, normal RFC 8029 procedures will be used and if no ip connectivity to initiator echo-reply will be dropped. I don't think this document need to specify it. 6.3 The responder MAY check the reachability of the top label in its own Label Forwarding Information Base (LFIB) before sending the echo reply. A fine use of MAY, but you should indicate how/why an implementation would make this choice. --- <SH> Tried to cover, why an implementation may do it "The responder MAY check the reachability of the top label in its own Label Forwarding Information Base (LFIB) before sending the echo reply and provide necessary log information in case of unreachabilty." 6.3 In certain scenarios,the head-end may choose to send Type C/Type D segments consisting of IPV4 address or IPv6 address. "may" or "MAY"? Which scenarios and why make that choice? <SH> changed to MAY These are just implementation choices and I think it's not necessary to talk about Why an implementation would choose to do it that way. --- 6.3 Optionally SID may also be associated with the Type C/Type D segment. "Optionally" or "It is OPTIONAL"? How is his choice determined? --- <SH> Again it's implementation choice. 6.3 The reply path return code must be set as described in section 7.4 of [RFC7110]. The Reply Path TLV must be included in an echo reply indicating the specified return path that the echo reply message is required to follow as described in section 5.3 of [RFC7110]. "must" or "MUST"? (twice) --- <SH> These are from RFC 7110 and I was asked to remove MUST in previous review. 6.4 Is it possible that the TTL pre-increment is 255? --- <SH> may be. If that happens, existing standards already specify what should be done. This document is not going to change that. 7. Example topologies given in Figure 1 and Figure 2 will be used I think that your examples here all use ASBRs, so you are actually limiting yourself to Figure 1 except for the final paragraph of 7.2.2? --- <SH> yes. That is correct. Anything to be clarified about this? 7. IGPs like OSPF/ISIS Are there many IGPs like OSPF and ISIS? -- <SH> May be in future 😊. We have RIFT already 7.1 s/mpls/MPLS/ You have some non-ASCII characters --- <SH> I fixed some but not sure I did the right way. Does IDnits catch this? 7.2.1 You have a couple of cases of "MUST" in this section. But this is an example, not normative text. So I think "will" is good enough. --- <SH> Done 8. and subsections Please use Title Case for the section headings --- <SH> Done 8.1 Is "to traceroute" really a verb leading to the participle "tracerouted"? --- <SH> This comment is too "technical" for me. Can you suggest correct sentence pls? 8.1 This seems very late to be introducing the expansion of ABR which you have used before. --- <SH> All previous uses are names so I though this is first place its being used in text. 8.1 In cases when SRGB is not uniform across the network, it is RECOMMENDED to add a Type C or a Type D segment. Fair enough, but why might an implementation choose to do otherwise and what are the benefits/implications? --- <SH> some implementation may come up with other smart ways of doing it. This document will not restrict those implementation choices. 10.1 You cite "[IANA]" but have no matching reference --- <SH> fixed 10.2 I don't think that Figure 7 needs to be a figure. <SH> fixed _______________________________________________ mpls mailing list mpls@ietf.org https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/mpls__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!B7Ff8868TaqCp1zMGGfPx37gxIVnvcUdZgT9M5drdwRi3aDww_0OxUTpWY_su3WVw7CS63GNDubL9E31Bg$
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