Re: [multimob] I-D Action: draft-ietf-multimob-fmipv6-pfmipv6-multicast-04.txt

["Thomas C. Schmidt" <[e-mail]>]

Hi Stig,

thanks for looking at the details carefully!

All should be fixed in the present submission.

Thomas

On 19.03.2014 20:01, Stig Venaas wrote:
> Hi
>
> Thanks for posting this much improved version. I have some comments on
> this one too though. Can others in the WG please also see if they are
> happy with this latest one?
>
> Here are my minor comments.
>
> Mark it as an update of RFC5568.
>
> Typo in 4.1.2: indicatior
>
> IN 4.2.2 it says:
>
>     The PMAG then waits for receiving the Multicast Acknowledgement
>     Option(s) with a HACK message (see Section 5.4) and the creation of
>     the bidirectional tunnel with NMAG.
>
> Better language to write "wait until it receives"?
>
> Also:
>
>     It SHOULD start forwarding traffic down the
>     tunnel interface for those groups an MLD listener report was
>     received from NMAG.
>
> Add "for which"? "For those groups for which an MLD"...
>
> 5.2:
> In most of the document you use FBACK and HACK, but here you refer
> to them as FBAck and HAck.
>
> Appendix A:
> You write "In this section", but perhaps say appendix?
>
> Remove change log? Not that useful in the RFC I think.
>
> Stig
>

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