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"Kent Leung (kleung)" <kleung@cisco.com> Thu, 24 July 2014 18:48 UTC

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From: "Kent Leung (kleung)" <kleung@cisco.com>
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Hi Rajesh et al. A few comments on this draft.


1.      Abstract section: "Geo-location" -> "geolocation"?

2.      "operator-identifier" -> "operator identifier"

3.      "Civic Location" -> "civic location"

4.      "MAG Group Identifier -> "MAG group identifier"?

5.      Introduction: "ANI mobility Option" -> "ANI mobility option"

6.      "may contain SSID and BSSID of the Access Point (AP)" (remove comma)

7.      "Geo-Location of the AP" -> "geolocation of the AP"

8.      "Operator-Identifier" -> "operator identifier"?

9.      "Geo-spatial" -> "geospatial"?

10.    "The group-identifier is used a proxy for coarse location" -> "The group identifier is used as proxy for coarse location"

11.    "group-identifier" -> "group identifier" (global change)

12.    General comment on consistency for words: geolocation, civic location, AP group identifier, etc.

13.    Sect. 3.1: How is the XML encoding represented?

14.    "as identifier by an operator-identifier" -> "as identifier by an operator"

15.    Reserved field description is missing (e.g. MUST be set to zero when sending and ignored when received.)

16.    Sect. 3.2: "2 octet integer" -> "2 octet unsigned integer"?

17.    "left to implementation. )" (extra space before parenthesis)

18.    Sect. 3.3: Extra reserved field description

19.    "It indicates the time in seconds before the MAG sends an update value of ANI mobility options assuming ANI value changed"?



Kent

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