RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status
"Andrea Westerinen" <andreaw@cisco.com> Tue, 03 September 2002 20:40 UTC
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From: Andrea Westerinen <andreaw@cisco.com>
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Subject: RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status
Date: Tue, 03 Sep 2002 13:40:07 -0700
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Discussion points up here: - Your revised wording of #3 is ok with me. - About reference [3]... If you don't add the DMTF document URL that is ok with me, but you do have a URL in reference [11]. IMHO, it would help the readers of this document to (at least) get the high level URLs for DMTF (www.dmtf.org), OMG, ITU, etc since they might not know where to look for the references. Andrea -----Original Message----- From: Juergen Schoenwaelder [mailto:schoenw@ibr.cs.tu-bs.de] Sent: Tuesday, September 03, 2002 1:18 PM To: andreaw@cisco.com Cc: nmrg@ibr.cs.tu-bs.de Subject: Re: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status >>>>> Andrea Westerinen writes: Andrea> A couple of comments on the draft: Andrea> 1. The sentence, "In particularly the terms "Information Andrea> Model" (IM) and "Data Model" (DM) (Section 1) turned out to be Andrea> controversial." should read "In PARTICULAR ...." fixed Andrea> 2. The sentence, "... its outcome, which is a better Andrea> understanding of the terms "Information Model" and "Data Andrea> Model", as presented in this document." (Section 1) should Andrea> read "... its outcome, ..., IS presented in this document." fixed Andrea> 3. The sentence, "The purpose of an IM is to model managed Andrea> objects at a high conceptual level, which is easy to Andrea> understand for the human designer or human manager. ..." Andrea> (Section 2) needs some clarification. "High conceptual level" Andrea> implies broad concepts, but IMs can define detailed data. I Andrea> would say "The purpose of an IM is to model managed objects as Andrea> abstractions, independent of specific implementations or Andrea> protocols used to transport the data. The degree of Andrea> specificity (or detail) of the IM is dependent on the modeling Andrea> needs of its designers." I would like to keep "conceptual level" in that sentence because we use this word later on in several places. What about this: The purpose of an IM is to model managed objects at a conceptual level as abstractions, independent of specific implementations or protocols used to transport the data. The degree of specificity (or detail) of the IM is dependent on the modeling needs of its designers. Andrea> 4. I do not understand the importance of "managers" in the Andrea> following sentence, "An IM is primarily useful for designers Andrea> and managers" (Section 3). I would expand the sentence and use Andrea> the "guide" word from John Strassner's mail - "An IM is Andrea> primarily useful for designers to describe the managed Andrea> environment, for managers to understand the modeled objects, Andrea> and for implementors as a guide to the functionality that must Andrea> be described and coded in their DMs." fine with me Andrea> 5. The following sentence is not grammatically correct and Andrea> should be reworded. "SMIng also supports some object-oriented Andrea> principles and provides an extension mechanism which allows to Andrea> add more features such as support for methods when the Andrea> protocols support them without breaking SMIng Andrea> implementations." (Section 4) My suggestion would be: "SMIng Andrea> also supports some object-oriented principles and provides Andrea> extension mechanisms allowing the addition of new features Andrea> (such as support for methods). New features can then be used Andrea> when supported by underlying protocols, without breaking SMIng Andrea> implementations." fixed Andrea> 6. The sentence, "Instead, the SMIng working group currently Andrea> focusses resources on developing a third version of the SMI Andrea> (SMIv3) which ..." (Section 4) should be simplified as Andrea> "Instead the SMIng working group is developing a third version Andrea> of the SMI (SMIv3) which ..." fixed Andrea> 7. Could you have reference [3] include the URL Andrea> http://www.dmtf.org/standards/published_documents.php? This Andrea> is where DSP 0004 is permanently located. Not sure (a) how I do that with xml2rfc and (b) if I like to go down the path of adding URLs to references at all (I am old fashioned). /js -- Juergen Schoenwaelder <http://www.informatik.uni-osnabrueck.de/schoenw/>
- Re: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Juergen Schoenwaelder
- RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status John Strassner
- Re: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Juergen Schoenwaelder
- RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Wijnen, Bert (Bert)
- Re: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Dave Sidor
- RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Harrington, David
- Re: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Dave Sidor
- RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Harrington, David
- Re: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Juergen Schoenwaelder
- RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Wijnen, Bert (Bert)
- Re: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Juergen Schoenwaelder
- RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Wijnen, Bert (Bert)
- [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Juergen Schoenwaelder
- RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Andrea Westerinen
- RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Wijnen, Bert (Bert)
- RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Andrea Westerinen
- Re: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Juergen Schoenwaelder
- RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Andrea Westerinen
- Re: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Juergen Schoenwaelder
- RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Andrea Westerinen
- Re: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Juergen Schoenwaelder
- Re: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status J.P. Martin-Flatin
- [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status Juergen Schoenwaelder
- RE: [nmrg] draft-irtf-nmrg-im-dm-00.txt status John Strassner