[nwcrg] IRTF Chair review of draft-irtf-nwcrg-tetrys-02

[Colin Perkins <[e-mail]>]

The NWCRG chairs have requested that draft-irtf-nwcrg-tetrys-02 be 
published as an RFC on the IRTF stream. The IRTF publication process is 
described in RFC 5743, and comprises a review by the IRSG to ensure 
technical and editorial quality, followed by a check by the IESG to 
ensure the work does not conflict with IETF standards activities.

As IRTF Chair, I perform an initial review of all drafts submitted for 
publication on the IRTF stream before sending them for detailed review 
by the IRSG. This note provides my review comments, for discussion.

Authors, please can you also respond to this message to confirm that all 
necessary IPR disclosures, as described on 
https://irtf.org/policies/ipr,  have been made?

Result: Ready with nits

RFC 5743 compliance: The draft follows the guidelines in RFC 5743

Comments:
* Please review the use of normative MAY; most instances of this are not 
describing normative requirements and would be better phrased as 
“can” or “may”. Consider citing RFC 8174 in preference to RFC 
2119.
* Section 5.3.1, paragraph starting “For example, the Coded Symbol 3 
is a linear combination” and the following bullet list prior to 
Section 5.3.1.1 are not clearly written. In particular, it’s not clear 
if the bullet points relate to the example or are more general design 
rationale.
* Section 5.3.1.1 would benefit from an introductory sentence to set the 
context.
* Section 6.3 talks about the “IRTF LOOPS working group” but there 
is no such group. This is presumably referring to the IETF BoF.

Colin Perkins
IRTF Chair



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Colin Perkins
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