[OPSAWG] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-opsawg-tlstm-update-11

[Joel Halpern via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Reviewer: Joel Halpern
Review result: Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-opsawg-tlstm-update-11
Reviewer: Joel Halpern
Review Date: 2023-02-09
IETF LC End Date: 2023-02-20
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This document is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard RFC

Major issues: N/A

Minor issues:
    In the fourth paragraph of section 1.1, the text refers to "a secure
    association between two TLS Transport Models (TLSTMs)".  As I understand
    the terminology, there is one TLSTM.  There are two instances of /
    realizations of the model.  Should the sentence refer to instances or
    realizations, rather than two models? (i-d nits gets confused by the
    references to rfc 5953 in the revision description.  After looking at it, I
    realized there was no problem here, rather it is accurate.  A comment on
    this in item 14 of the shepherd writeup would have been helpful.)

Nits/editorial comments: N/A