Re: [OPSAWG] Working group last call on "Ethernet in the First Mile Copper (EFMCu) Interfaces MIB"

[t.petch <[e-mail]>]

Some more editorial suggestions.

OLD
"  With the conclusion of the [HUBMIB] working group, the responsibility
   for the maintenance and further development of the EFM-CU-MIB module
   has been transfered to the Institute of Electrical and Electronics
   Engineers (IEEE) [802.3] working group."
NEW
"  With the conclusion of the [HUBMIB] working group, the responsibility
   for the maintenance and further development of a MIB module
  for managing 10PASS-TS and
      2BASE-TL Ethernet in the First Mile Copper (EFMCu) interfaces;
   has been transfered to the Institute of Electrical and Electronics
   Engineers (IEEE) [802.3] working group."

[I trust that the IEEE will not be reissuing the IETF MIB module!]

OLD
"   The names of the objects in IEEE8023-EFM-CU-MIB are identical to
   those in EFM-CU-MIB."
NEW
"   The names of the objects in the first version of the
IEEE8023-EFM-CU-MIB are identical to
   those in EFM-CU-MIB."
[Again, remove the implied update of the IETF MIB module}

OLD
becomes the last valid version of that MIB.
NEW
becomes the last valid version of that MIB module.

[It is a MIB module not the MIB - not sure about the valid, I would omit
that ]

Overall, I think that the thrust is right, which I did not say about
version -00.

Tom Petch


----- Original Message -----
From: "Romascanu, Dan (Dan)" <[e-mail]>
To: "Melinda Shore" <[e-mail]>; <[e-mail]>
Sent: Wednesday, August 07, 2013 1:45 PM


> Hi,
>
> I support this document and I believe that it is almost ready for
submission to the IESG. I have a number of editorial comments, their
resolution does not require IMO to re-do the WGLC.
>
> 1. In the Abstract:
>
> OLD:
>
>    It amends that specification by
>    informing the internet community about the transition of the
EFM-CU-
>    MIB module from the IETF Ethernet Interfaces and Hub MIB Working
>    Group to the Institute of Electrical and Electronics Engineers
(IEEE)
>    802.3 working group.
>
> NEW:
>
>    It amends that specification by
>    informing the community about the transition of the EFM-CU-MIB
>    module from the concluded IETF Ethernet Interfaces and Hub MIB
Working
>    Group to the Institute of Electrical and Electronics Engineers
(IEEE)
>    802.3 working group.
>
> 2. In the Introduction:
>
> s/the Institute of Electrical and Electronics Engineers (IEEE) [802.3]
working group/the Institute of Electrical and Electronics Engineers
(IEEE) 802.3 [802.3] working group/
>
> 3. Also in the Introduction:
>
>    In 2011 the IEEE developed
>    IEEE8023-EFM-CU-MIB module, defined in IEEE Std 802.3.1-2011
>    [802.3.1] and based on the EFM-CU-MIB, defined in RFC 5066.
>
> Better drop 'In 2011' - this information is not relevant and is
probably not accurate, as 2011 is the year of the publication (obvious
from the name), development took longer
>
> 4. Also in the Introduction:
>
> s/The IEEE8023-EFM-CU-MIB and EFM-CU-MIB are both valid MIB modules,
which can coexist./ The IEEE8023-EFM-CU-MIB and EFM-CU-MIB MIB modules
can coexist./
>
> 5. In Section 4:
>
> OLD:
>
>    Requests and comments pertaining to EFM Copper Interfaces MIB
SHOULD
>    be sent to the IEEE 803.3.1 task force mailing list:
>    [[e-mail]].
>
> NEW:
>
>    Requests and comments pertaining to EFM Copper Interfaces MIB
SHOULD
>    be sent to the IEEE 802.3 Working Group. Currently the IEEE 802.3.1
>    task force (chartered with MIB development) mailing list is
>    [[e-mail]].
>
> 6. Also in section 4:
>
> s/jurisdiction/control/
>
>
> Regards,
>
> Dan
>
>
> > -----Original Message-----
> > From: [e-mail] [mailto:[e-mail]] On
Behalf
> > Of Melinda Shore
> > Sent: Tuesday, August 06, 2013 12:42 AM
> > To: [e-mail]
> > Subject: [OPSAWG] Working group last call on "Ethernet in the First
Mile
> > Copper (EFMCu) Interfaces MIB"
> >
> > Reminder:  https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-opsawg-
> > rfc5066bis/
> > is in working group last call, which closes August 7.  Please have a
> > look at it and post any comments to the opsawg mailing list.
> >
> > Melinda
> >
> >
> > -------- Original Message --------
> > Subject: Working group last call on "Ethernet in the First Mile
Copper
> > (EFMCu) Interfaces MIB"
> > Date: Wed, 24 Jul 2013 11:42:13 -0800
> > From: Melinda Shore <[e-mail]>
> > To: [e-mail] <[e-mail]>
> >
> > This is to announce the start of working group last call on:
> >
> >     Ethernet in the First Mile Copper (EFMCu) Interfaces MIB
> >     https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-opsawg-rfc5066bis/
> >
> > It is intended for publication as a standards track RFC.
> >
> > Please give it a careful read and provide any feedback to this
mailing
> > list by August 7, 2013.
> >
> > Thanks,
> >
> > opsawg chairs
> >
> >
> >